Thursday, March 22, 2012

Inflamed


 The hues of the fall come down your tresses.
Your locks fall matted to your side.
The ashes of the cigarette on the table top
Are all that remain
Of the fire that took your body tonight.


22 comments:

Enchanta said...

I'm beyond the tangible thoughts of my mind to come up with something that can express how choked I am.
As I had said earlier when you told me what it's about... Five BIG and MIGHTY lines.

nil said...

^echo.

D2 said...

@Enchanta : Nah, they're alright. I don't even remember why I came up with them. I found it darkly sexy and tried to manipulate it so it sounded ambiguous. :D

D2 said...

@nil : Comment to Enchanta echoed. :P
haha Thanks a lot. Glad you liked it. :D

Antara said...

Wow. My interpretation is probably miles off the actual spot...but this...is powerful.

D2 said...

@Antara : There probably cannot be one interpretation to this. I thought I'd leave it as open-ended as possible. It has at least four different meanings.
Thanks a lot. :-)

Enchanta said...

I have three meanings lined up... and although dark, I find them strangely erotic.
God, this has got to be favourited.

Antara said...

I have two...one is dark and sexy and the other is just plain dark.
And I agree about this being favourited.

Ruhani said...

Ooh :O
Okay THAT^ is a highly lame comment, but please, maths is MATHS BOARD EXAM. Do I need to say anything else? =P

Ruhani said...

Oh I meant "I have my maths board exam" . Jeez. =P

Enchanta said...

The lingering dingy scent fills the air,
Suffocating my tainted breath,
Of all the ruins and remnants there,
I wear the scars,
That have burnt me best.

Just a mediocre addition. Because I just HAD TO add!

D2 said...

@Enchanta and Antara : Don't bother about the fourth. It's for lesser minds even though it does exist. :P

And yeah, it's dark. I like dark. :P

@Enchanta : Spot on, though I don't know how you can find the other two meanings erotic. :-/

D2 said...

@Ruhani : Absolutely not. You should be working hard and going through your calculus notes right about now and practicing like mad! :P
Alright I'm kidding. You need to loosen up. Loosy goosie. :P

D2 said...

@Enchanta :
The temporal scars working inside.
Bear pain and immortality.
The edge of the sword driven inside bleeds raw.

I quite like your addition. :P

Enchanta said...

@D2: I don't think I'm going to discuss how I find the other two meanings erotic on a public portal. Rather too gory.
But I'll let you know, of course. ;)

D2 said...

@Enchanta : hahaha Alright then. I'll wait. :P

Saru Singhal said...

Powerful and I loved the play of words...:)

D2 said...

@Saru Singhal : Thank you so much. :)

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Isha Ethera said...

intense.
I like that bit.

very provoking!

D2 said...

@Isha : Thank you. I intend to agitate. :)

N.S.Kirti said...

Intenssssseeee. sorry if this sounds like a repeated comment :P but this word is the only thing that came to my mind when i read it.
"Your locks fall matted to your side." i somehow love this line a lot... a LOT...
this was awesome...

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